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behind these eyes by ~-tank:icon-tank:

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always searching
for
always looking for
how can i find you
when i haven't found myself
forgotten memories
emotions lost
in a mist of confusion
inspiration misplaced
in a flash of hatred

hope dies along
with the sun
am i blind?
paralyzed by this feeling
of insignificance
im still blind.

laughter is my only friend
close your eyes
hide the pain
with a
smile.
©2003-2010 ~-tank
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Author's Comments

i've had some thoughts on my mind...but i could really put them together well enough to write it...until i read ~ oddlyaromatic poem, in a million [link] ... i can honestly say, it inspired me to write this... anyway, as always kind of emotional...and i hate the way it turned out...people say im too critical of myself...oh well...

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`eolhc Oct 11, 2003, 5:21:41 PM
youre too critical of yourself :)
nicely written piece
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~holy123 Oct 11, 2003, 5:27:38 PM
I LOVE IT ....LOVE IT LOVE IT SOOOOO MUCH...IT CAN ACTUALLY BE SUNG INTO A SONG :) VERY GOOD LOVE U BYE BYE

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~tanyazpics Oct 11, 2003, 5:57:47 PM
wow... i really love this poem a lot... wonderfully written and a great use of expression, keep it up... this is definitely a :+fav:! :D

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~jusi Oct 12, 2003, 9:31:39 AM
i like the lyrics/words in this its like a whole misunderstood situation which you gotta just smile at, i love that.

well done
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~spin0spin0suga Oct 13, 2003, 5:40:01 PM
Im liking how you asked that question and answered it so smoothly... sounded sweet! Am I blind? Im still blind. Lovely.

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=divisal Oct 14, 2003, 10:03:37 AM
very smooth..most poems like this seem to force things down others throats..this one just lets everything come in smoothly..i don't know if you know what i'm talking about but it sounded right in my head..lol..great wrd usage..and wonderful imagery..:hug: ..*two thumbs up*

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`bookdiva Oct 14, 2003, 7:39:55 PM
WE all do that, hide our pain behind something..smiles, whatever. Nicely written, well defined, it's a terrific metaphor for pain...lovely, Joe.

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`sanguru Oct 17, 2003, 6:08:59 PM
it's an awesome poem. i really wish i could say more right now, but i'm quite upset (for reasons not pertaining to this poem) and really cant put into words what i feel. i love it though.
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~hummuss Feb 12, 2005, 6:00:30 AM
hide the pain with a smile. so true. how often we do that. good poem.

I am gone to watchlist you so I can read some more of your stuff later. :) found you through april123's page. (in case you wondering)

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